tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post8150292680745876103..comments2023-09-07T08:36:51.106-07:00Comments on Garden Full of Lily: "The Writer's Voice" SubmissionJennie Baileyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02088195986628533511noreply@blogger.comBlogger45125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-60499562585225792952012-07-15T08:03:32.459-07:002012-07-15T08:03:32.459-07:00Great query and I see you are through to Xmas in J...Great query and I see you are through to Xmas in July! Congrats! Will be following you to see how you get on ;)VikLithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12675200811539358961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-89776967772824158652012-05-24T11:28:47.425-07:002012-05-24T11:28:47.425-07:00that is one awesome query!
Nutschell
www.thewritin...that is one awesome query!<br />Nutschell<br />www.thewritingnut.comnutschellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10967710710805174781noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-19284352430528706432012-05-11T14:31:22.756-07:002012-05-11T14:31:22.756-07:00Holy Cow, I see why Krista picked you.
I love love...Holy Cow, I see why Krista picked you.<br />I love love this concept and I want to read the book. NOW!<br />Team Krista Rocks!<br />-#122Ryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17789434379917863100noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-7822760348428797442012-05-08T14:59:48.970-07:002012-05-08T14:59:48.970-07:00such an interesting idea. loved the first page. co...such an interesting idea. loved the first page. congrats on being selected and good luck with the rest of the contest!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-16538480674410931862012-05-08T14:51:56.050-07:002012-05-08T14:51:56.050-07:00Glad you got picked, Lady! You rock!Glad you got picked, Lady! You rock!Abby Minardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11963640263845561309noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-37671848829909329752012-05-07T10:44:28.827-07:002012-05-07T10:44:28.827-07:00Formaldehyde and death-- Awesome! Well done... #16...Formaldehyde and death-- Awesome! Well done... #163Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09732216553112200321noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-38554038277648557452012-05-07T10:29:03.630-07:002012-05-07T10:29:03.630-07:00Great query and excerpt!! And I really like the pr...Great query and excerpt!! And I really like the premise. Good luck!alexiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07122487552931794871noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-80046816008113661852012-05-07T06:46:24.601-07:002012-05-07T06:46:24.601-07:00Love the concept! Especially the mistaken hero. Co...Love the concept! Especially the mistaken hero. Congrats!<br /><br />-Sarah #146Sarahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09413714094858463770noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-304930770467178942012-05-06T21:44:43.270-07:002012-05-06T21:44:43.270-07:00Congrats on getting picked!Congrats on getting picked!Nicole Zoltackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07464800543376449290noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-70489945409486496912012-05-06T16:53:38.431-07:002012-05-06T16:53:38.431-07:00I love your query! Congrats on getting picked!! :)...I love your query! Congrats on getting picked!! :)Precy Larkinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16714824672731935371noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-92027606335290284252012-05-06T13:16:28.504-07:002012-05-06T13:16:28.504-07:00This is a strong premise with a lot of potential. ...This is a strong premise with a lot of potential. I think you'll do it justice. Grats on getting picked.C.G.Aylinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09612362478635598996noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-15538200385166595902012-05-06T12:48:32.114-07:002012-05-06T12:48:32.114-07:00I haven't read half yet but this one really st...I haven't read half yet but this one really stands out for me. Good to see that you have been picked.Timhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01878752949268111927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-90684591677547308322012-05-06T08:19:53.070-07:002012-05-06T08:19:53.070-07:00Whoo hoo! You got picked!! YAY!!!Whoo hoo! You got picked!! YAY!!!Jennhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07835079187093517851noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-62574181589576742432012-05-06T08:19:10.211-07:002012-05-06T08:19:10.211-07:00Yay! You got picked!! I'll be rooting for yo...Yay! You got picked!! I'll be rooting for you, and I totally can't wait to read this!!!Jennhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07835079187093517851noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-24295773144670814832012-05-06T00:10:01.157-07:002012-05-06T00:10:01.157-07:00Congrats! Very compelling first 250. I'd lik...Congrats! Very compelling first 250. I'd like to know more. :)<br /><br />Tina (#194)TYHatchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00654651712633828288noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-43008864576847131732012-05-05T20:18:26.272-07:002012-05-05T20:18:26.272-07:00I'm also wondering what the mystery skill is t...I'm also wondering what the mystery skill is that she's supposed to have. I'd love to see more :) Congrats on being picked for Krista's team!Veronica Bartleshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04452926814324819692noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-50677352322052841382012-05-05T19:28:51.865-07:002012-05-05T19:28:51.865-07:00Yeay! Congrats on being chosen! You so deserve it!...Yeay! Congrats on being chosen! You so deserve it! This book is golden!Colene Murphyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06086195075690893194noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-41981788591184788922012-05-05T18:36:34.803-07:002012-05-05T18:36:34.803-07:00Not usually a fan of dystopia but I was totally su...Not usually a fan of dystopia but I was totally sucked in by your query. Congrats on being chosen and good luck!Dahlia Adlerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02265012593385220677noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-52923201022006497932012-05-05T17:03:55.765-07:002012-05-05T17:03:55.765-07:00Nice! :D Good luck, Jennie!Nice! :D Good luck, Jennie!Carrie Butlerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01540590799406170410noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-75701965606016830462012-05-05T15:17:34.493-07:002012-05-05T15:17:34.493-07:00I love the premise so much! I can't wait to s...I love the premise so much! I can't wait to see this on the shelves so I can read further!!Jessa Russo https://www.blogger.com/profile/07061996967428020722noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-884598174210936132012-05-05T13:06:59.821-07:002012-05-05T13:06:59.821-07:00This is awesome! It's so different from the ot...This is awesome! It's so different from the other dystopian stuff out there. I want more!SueJayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14428582843087294011noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-35716678225728307442012-05-05T11:31:20.932-07:002012-05-05T11:31:20.932-07:00I want you! This premise screams high-concept, and...I want you! This premise screams high-concept, and I'm all about high-concept. I recently saw a story on CNN about an underground silo like this one, so I think this idea is current in a dystopian-saturated market. I also loved the action on the first page. I normally like a little more intro before jumping into an action scene, but this page worked for me, probably because the MC treated it so casually, as if she'd been expecting this for ages.<br /><br />I do have a few line edits I'd suggest, and I think you could make several plot points in the query more specific. (For instance, I want to know what skill she's supposed to have--and why she doesn't.) Also, I'd want to talk about changing the genre to something like YA speculative fiction, just because I wouldn't want an agent to dismiss this out of hand (and because this seems more post-apocalyptic than dystopian to me, anyway).<br /><br />I really, really want you and SILO on my team, so pick me, pick me! This was one of the very first entries I read, and it stayed with me through all 200:)Krista Van Dolzerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08830193414560232842noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-13194656876746850652012-05-05T02:36:00.332-07:002012-05-05T02:36:00.332-07:00This is SO great! I absolutely love the concept, i...This is SO great! I absolutely love the concept, it's definitely something I'd keep reading. Such great voice too... gah, I just love this. Good luck in the contest!Kat Ellishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12263183221725778043noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-87355759954732173272012-05-04T23:20:39.672-07:002012-05-04T23:20:39.672-07:00Good luck from one Writer's Voice contestant t...Good luck from one Writer's Voice contestant to another!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7049806523867335071.post-54747064152153345122012-05-04T15:32:47.813-07:002012-05-04T15:32:47.813-07:00Oh, that is cool!! The Noah's Ark spin is gna...Oh, that is cool!! The Noah's Ark spin is gnarly, I dig that.<br /><br />I also dig your background, lol. My love of owls runs deep!<br /><br />#40 in Writer's VoiceAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17193294741781407749noreply@blogger.com